Travel Memory is Treasure

Student ID: 07101

Portfolio for Writing IV,
Section 1a


(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. Overview

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. Essays

(See: Note 3, below.)

Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates yy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
Website review 08.09.29 (375+ words)	Travel Memory is Treasure	08.09.27	3	379	5	1	0	0
Favorite place(-s) 08.10.20 (450+ words)	My Favorite Places in Nagasaki	08.10.10	4	542	0	0	4	0
Mrs. Doubtfire 08.11.04 (500+ words)	Family love is forever	08.11.01	5	608	6	1	2	1
Community life 08.11.17 (default length*)	Emotional Growth	08.11.15	5	589	0	1	0	0
Kumamoto's best-kept secrets 08.12.01 (5+ ¶¶)	How to maintain the amusement park	08.11.30	3	331	0	1	4	0
Learning with computers 2008.12.15 (6+ ¶¶)	Useful but Pay attention!	08.12.13	5	413	0	0	2	0
Totals	---	---	25	2,862	11	4	12	1

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post
*: "long enough to cover the ... [communities] you choose," Writing Studio Blog, Preparation for Next Essays, 2008.10.29)

1.2. Best Essay

Selection and Assessment: Which of those six assigned essays do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• I think my best essay is "Mr. Doubtfire" movie essay(MR2-01: Mr. Doubtfire ~Family love is forever~) because it contains some pictures and also media and link, so it reminds us how this story is. Besides, I told about my opinions through this movie, so reader can find my thought. I didn't write outline of this movie because I wanted people to know my thought more than the outline. Then I divided a piece of writing into paragraphs included each topics I wanted to tell, so I think it's easy to see.

2.0. Comments

Showcase	Titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	...	...	...	...
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	"Diary 7: Mon, August 25th"	08.09.01	65	friendly, cheerful ("You can!!You caaaaaaan!! HAHA:)")
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	"Rotorua Weekend ~Part 1~"	08.09.04	94	heartwarming, friendly ("Nojomi〜〜!!I miss you, too!"/using smiley)
2.4. Most comments on:	Titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	Essay2-01: WEB site review ~Travel Memory is Treasure~	08.09.27	184	questions, empathic (trying to continue conversation/having an interest)
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.10.27	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	132	thankful, response ("Thank you for commenting my essay"/respond to these question)
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	NEXT	08.12.03	43	friendly, interest ("Do you have any favorite movies? if you have, tell me them, please ;) coz... i really like to watch movies!)
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.12.12	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	54	friendly, recommend ("Hey,what's up!?"/telling some of my favorite movies.)

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes them good comments.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• I put a recent comments display on head of a sidebar because I can find new comment at once and reply to it immediately.
  

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• I think giving and receiving comments are very good way to communicate with other people because it's easy to do and it sometimes cheer up people. I was really glad when I posted a blog post and then my friend replied a comment for it. Since then, I became even more conscious of that people look at my blog, so I became aim to write more interesting posts.

3.0. Book Reviews

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates (yy.mm.dd)	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	07.05.16	39	1
2-01	Magic Tricks	08.08.04	137	0
2-02	Boats!	08.08.14	160	0
2-03	Flood!	08.08.21	275	0
2-04	Shooting stars	08.08.25	243	0
2-05	Lost in the Jungle	08.09.05	268	0
2-06	The Rainbow Machine	08.09.12	158	0
2-07	Red Planet	08.09.15	156	0
2-08	Rescue!	08.10.02	184	0
2-09	Sam's New Flat	08.10.07	184	0
2-10	Dutch Adventure	08.10.13	210	0
2-11	Survival Adventure	08.10.19	167	0
2-12	The Coldest Place on Earth	08.10.25	219	0
2-13	Grasshopper on the road	08.11.01	291	0
2-14	Frog and Toad Are Friends	08.11.18	158	0
2-15	The Motorway	08.11.14	238	0
2-16	Alice's Adventure in Wonderland	08.11.21	162	0
2-17	The PIANO	08.12.02	238	0
2-18	GUCCI ~BUSINESS IN FASHION~	08.12.12	208	0
---	---	Totals:	3,656	0

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• I think BR2-08: Rescue! is my best book review because it contains my opinion. It has not many words but it has a most impotant point I thought. Besides, I didn't write the outline a lot. Actually, this book is short story, so I tryied to think some ideas from this story topic. Then I changed the color of sentences which I'd like to enphasize. This is also a good point that it contained a photograph of this book.

4.0. Blog Layout, Labeling, Linking, & Media

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	○
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	○
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	○
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?	○
4.2. Does your blog have labels displayed in sidebar?	○
5.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (18) AND "reviews" (5)	○
"essays" (12) AND "portfolios" (1)	○
"quickposts" (21)	○
"links" (6) AND "media" (6)	○
"movies" (11) AND "websites" (０)		○
"brainstorms" (5), "essay prep.," (8)AND "free-writing"(4)	○
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	○
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? __17_ other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. photos (73) diary entries (51) homestay (35) YouTube (34) quickposts (32) book reviews (31) languages (30) New Zealand (29) opinions (26) families (25) friends (24) essays (20) introductions (15) medias (14) movie reviews (13) typing topics (13) amusements (9) essay preps (8) favorites (8) links (8) reviews (8) jobs (7) brainstorms (5) OtherReviews (4) free-writings (4) musics♪YouTube (4) outlines (4) animations (2) portfolios (2) drafts (1) lists (1)	---	---
4.3. Links & media	---	---
4.3.1. Does your blog include photos or other graphics?	○
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? __73_ posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	○
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? __2_ posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? _48__ posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: ...You Tube	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yy.mm.dd) for reference. 　　 Nothing especially.	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. ... I tried to add lists on my blog posting in this semester, so people can see the source.
2. ... I sometimes changed the font size and color which I'd like to emphasis.
3. ... I put some photos of people who are close to me on this blog.

5.0. Additional reflections on your blog and your writing on it

Please feel free to include reflections on both spring and fall semester work, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, and reflections).

• ... It was nice opportunity to write free-writings in English.
• ... Fall semester was not so hard compared to the spring semester, so I could feel more free to try it than before.
• ... I wanted some advice for my essays.
  

6.0. Advice and suggestions for yourself, your peers, and your successors

• ... You'd better keep writing because you'll feel hard to do it later if you neglect.
• ... It's good to write about your interests or everyday life. Try as if it's going to be your diary and your own world.
• ... It's important to think about readers. You'll be able to write more plainly, and you can write the essay which is getting the point.

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Notes:

1. This portfolio template derives from the templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc portfolios (2007-08), and Writing III, §§1a & 1c (Fall, 2008).
2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
   
3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derives from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   

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Essay2-05: Learning with computers ~Useful but Pay attention!~

Hello, today I talk about learning with computers. Computers are very useful for our life. They have a lot of useful functions we can't expect and give us so much information, so they are essential things for human beings. We use them for work and also for fun in everyday life. We can get much information we don't know, file information or documents, watch movies and many TV program, play games, communicate with others, and buy and sell something on Internet. There are so many useful functions but also there are some problems, so I talk about these things, and my experience and favorite function.


First of all, I talk about my favorite function. My favorite function in computer is "YouTube" because we can watch many kinds of TV programs or movies or personal videos or animations. There are lots of things we can't understand that is only picture or composition. We can get easily when we watch animated video. And also we can watch other country’s TV programs. Sometimes I watch abroad TV programs in English. It’s so interesting because I can know many things and change my world view.


Next, I experienced that my data vanished!! It made me really irritated. And also my printer didn’t work, so I couldn’t use it although I had to hand out the next day. Computer sometimes don’t work normally, so we need to start working a little earlier, I think. If you use too much time, your eyes and brain will become exhausted, so we also need to take a break some time. These are precautions for proper use.


Finally, I talk about some problems on computer. For example, there are personal information, wrong information, an online bad site like a dating site, and post some malicious slander messages on a bulletin board and so on. We have to nip in the bud these things as soon as possible. To do so, we should have objective eyes; think what is true and what is false. We must not abuse information.


As a conclusion, learning computer makes us convenient when we use proper way. We can communicate with other people and abroad, and get much information. We can enjoy using computers. However, there are many problems we have to pay attention. It needs a common sense act one by one because we can use freely. If we take note, the society will be better and more convenient.

[413 words]

BR2-18: GUCCI ~BUSINESS IN FASHION~

I chose "GUCCI" book this time because I didn't know the history of GUCCI. Do you?

Do you like brand things such as GUCCI? Actually, I am not interested in brand, but I want brand thing someday when I become more adult and the woman who is suit the brand thing. I think having a brand thing is the women's status. Guys give women some brand bags or watch or something, like that and women walk smartly in the street. That is my image of GUCCI.lol

GUCCI is now famous fashionable company in the world. Guccio Gucci run established the company, and it started in 1921 in Italy. His name is like GUCCI. I didn't know that.
GUCCI was in World War 2, so it was hard to sell expensive brand things to people. However, the company's people protected the product and keep loving their GUCCI products. It's awesome.

There are some points to be paid attention. I think it's not so good that young people have brand products because it seems cheep. And many people have brand bag, so it become worth nothing. Having brand things is nice but think these things I told you, and enjoy your fashion life!!

[208 words]

Learning with computers: Free writing2-05

Computers are very useful for our life. They has a lots of useful functions we can't expect and give so much information. And also they're essential things for human beings. We use them for work and also for fun everyday. We can get much information we didn't know, file information or documents, watch movies and many TV program, play games, communicate with others, and buy and sell somethings on Internet.

However, there are some problems. For example, there are personal information, wrong information, an online bad site like a dating site, and post some malicious slander messages on a bulletin board and so on. We have to nip in the bud these things as soon as possible.

[120 words]

Learning with computers: Outlining2-04

This is a outline of learning with computers.

★Intro

• how useful computer's fanctions are
• my experiences form the viewpoint of learning computers

★Body

• my favorite fanctions (Youtube, blog, internet)
• problems as a matter of using computers (personal information, wrong information etc)
• how to nip the bud
  
• expectation about future
  

★Conclusion

• conclusion of Intro and Body paragraphs
• the things we have to pay attention

[64 words]

Learning with computers: Brainstorming2-05

This is a brainstorming of learning with computers.

• can write quickly
• difficult to use the various functions that a computer has
• can get lots of information
  
• keep pace with the times
• get some knowledges
• internet
• blog
• write in English
• know other world
• contact with others
• communication
• typing
• Youtube
• iPod
• learning English
• file some information
• copy
• print out
• skype

[58 words]

NEXT

I watched a movie with my parent on DVD last week. It is “Next”.
It was so exciting movie! The main character, Cris has a special power which enable him to foresee 2 minutes into the future. FBI needed him to save from the terrorists but he didn’t want to corporate with them. However, he wanted to save his sweetheart, so he participated FBI and did battle with terrorists.

The movie is that keeps us on the edge of our seat! Nicolas Cage is so cool! I recommend you to watch this movie.


[94 words]

BR2-17: The PIANO

Hi. Do you like music? I love music. I love listening to music and also love playing the music. I like many kind of musics such as pop music, R&B, hawaiian music, ratin music and so on. Also I like classical music, especially piano's. So I chose this book. I've taken lessons on the piano for about 15 years, but I couldn't play very well. However, this main character, Tony became greate pianist at last although he didn't learn piano lessons before.

He was a farm boy because his family was very poor and he had to work in farm and give some money to his parents. He was so nice boy, I thought. One day, a farmer told Tony to take all out of an old cottage and thraw it away. And it contained a old piano. Tony likes music and piano, so he wanted it. He'd never played before, but he could play some beautiful music very well. The music came to him and moved his finger. It's so strange but I think he might be a genius! I envy him.

Then he placticed playing piano everyday. At last, he became a greate pianist!
I thought that no matter how he is a genius and has a talent for music, he needs so much practicing. It is difficult to master something but it is good becoming enthusiastic about something.

[238 words]